
A blackout enshrouds the city
The city dissolves into veils
Veils that numb the sounds with
a transparent darkness
Darkness that stops the drunk
city-lights from blinding stray dogs
The moon strains the silhouette
of the breathing buildings
on the water – tickled by the wind
The stars no longer shy away
from artificial lights
They shine boldly in the sky
sprouting unknown faces
on the terrace
I see a paper glowing white
under dry leaves
After so many days
It’s finally a night
Stunningly evocative writing. This works well as a descriptive poem but also as an extended metaphor for emergence from depression. Admirable work.
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Thank you, my friend. I love your interpretation of an emergence from depression – it hits home, I did want to evoke the feeling of freedom through the darkness. Thanks again for you generous comments!
Take care!
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Black Beauty, I agree with Chrisnelson61’s comment: Stunningly evocative writing. Congratulations & ♥
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your support, a lot. ♥
Take care.
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🙂 Epic as ever 🙂
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Thanks! 😀
How are you today?
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I’m okay, but dreading school tomorrow –
and you?
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I am alright, have an exam next week -.-
Ah, i get it, about the school, all the best for that and don’t…try your best not to panic. You’ll be fine! 🙂
I shall summon all the good wishes from Coldplay and direct it towards you. I talk as if i know them. Ahaha but i will do that for YOU! 😀
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Good luck with the exam – and equally, I send you coldplay magic 😀 *listening to them as we speak*
Thank you 🙂
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😀
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Its awesome how it displays a deep and depressing sort of image and at the same time, a beautiful night in a city. Its just so cool!!
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Thanks very much, Fatina! I love the interpretation, it is indeed meant to be both depressing and elevating. 🙂
Hope you are doing well!
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I am well! *grins* and i hope the same for you! 😉
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Yes, I am good! 😀
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This is phenomenal–I’m fascinated that the city-lights are described as drunk–WOW-good.
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Thanks so much! I’m glad you liked that adjective use!
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You sometimes toss in surprising word choices which really Light up your poetry, keeps me coming back for more and more!
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Aw, that’s very very kind of you P. You keep me going. Really, always stay the way you are. -Hugs-
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What sweet words! Turned my Monday frown upside down–thanks!
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Hehe, Yay! Yay! Thank you, P!
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Wow, D! This is something very intense and fluid. As you said……..both depressing and elevating. I love the voyage from city-veils-sounds-darkness to drunk…..it is very beautiful. Moon is trying to strain the silhouette of the buildings ; stars sprouting unknown faces on the terrace- Aaah…this is an implausible wonder. The definite roles are beautifully assigned. 🙂 I like the creativity here. “After so many days, it is finally a night”….This sums it up. So profound is this……….It shows how many nights you have missed struggling with your own self. I think, this night is the hope and peace you finally achieved after so many days of turmoil. It ended well and I am happy for that.
Got to learn about your exam thing…………all the wishes and prayers….just be cool. More than any preparation, trust yourself first. Shine bright, as always.
Love and Hugs! 🙂
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Thanks so much, R! It’s lovely how you take the understanding of each line – you’re wonderful. Ah, yes I wanted to add a magic show feel to it – hence the sprouting faces and all. Aw, thanks, R! Your praise overwhelms me. ❤
I hope it goes well, yes I will stay calm. Thank you, R! 🙂
Love and hugs for you too, my lovely friend!
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My Pleasure. Shine bright, Light. 🙂
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Rich and atmospheric 🙂
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Thanks so much! I’m really glad you thought so. 🙂
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My favorite lines: The stars no longer shy away, from artificial lights. That perfectly describes what happens when all of man’s artificial lights are aglow! I thought for a moment you were using the Loop Poetry form in the first stanza, but then you switched it up beautifully. Wonderful word pictures.
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Thank you! I’m really glad you liked that line – I did try to continue the loop for the rest of the poem but that was not possible somehow. Thanks so much for reading and commenting, I really appreciate your generous words. 🙂
Poetry forms is not my strong suit, but I found out about your blog page dedicated to forms and I’m sure it’ll be of help. 🙂
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Sometimes people don’t appreciate how beautiful life’s light is, until they experience how black the darkness of Life can be. Great work!
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That’s very true – we must appreciate what we’ve been blessed with. Thank you very much for your thoughtful comment and generous words. I’m glad we’re connected via WordPress now. 🙂
Have a nice rest of the week!
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Wow, awesome piece!
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Thank you very much! 🙂
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