I woke up before
the stars had dried
out of its light
And the night
still had some
melancholy left to
fill the minds
of those who were
always there for it
I could hear the
harsh wind blow over
the frozen lake
cursing its immobility
Could see the dew drops
glistening deliberately
like that was the purpose
of its existence
I could feel the warmth
of the floor below my feet
The warmth that saves us
and suffocates us
About nature and man it stays true
Blood is what separates light from hue
Wow!
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Thanks! =)
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On the cutting edge in every sense. Truly enjoyed this 🙂
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Oh, thank you very much, John! I’m pleased that you enjoyed it! 🙂
Have a great day!
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Light, this is an amazing poem! Brilliantly deep in thought! I absolutely love it!
Warm wishes,
Pepperanne ♥
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Thank you very much, Pepper! You’re very kind and generous, as always, my friend. Hope you’re having a nice day! ♥
Much Love
Light
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…”before
the stars had dried
out of its light”…
…
“The warmth that saves us
and suffocates us”…
“Blood is what separates light from hue”
your metaphors are incredibly powerful!
Great poem.
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Thank you very much! I’m pleased that you found the metaphors powerful.
Hope you’re doing well, my friend!
Much love. 🙂 ♥
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PS
♥ 🙂
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“Blood is what separates light from hue” oh you writer you
really good D! 🙂
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Oh, thank you, C! 😀 😀
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Wonderful imagery! 🙂
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Thank you very much, my friend. 🙂
Hope you’re doing well!
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Yes, thank you! Hope all is well with you, too. 🙂
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Yes, I am too, thank you! 🙂
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I like this Light, it reminds of my poem I named my site after:
“21 Shades of Blue”
by Ry Hakari
It’s constant winter here
and the stars are falling down,
lighting up the clouds
as the wind cries loud
because love has me
in the sleeper cell
I’m a true Jack Frost
and my name’s hush-hush
I pay off my promises
with the currency
of cold closed lips
so I can live and breathe
in this zero breeze
as it consumes me
under the willow tree
while waiting for the sun
to come out from
above the storm,
down below
to the center blue,
where I stand frozen still
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Thank you, Ryan! And, the poem you shared is splendidly evocative. I specifically love the second stanza – “I pay off my promises
with the currency
of cold closed lips
so I can live and breathe
in this zero breeze
as it consumes me”
That’s very powerful imagery. And, so are the ending lines.
Thank you for introducing me to your superb work, I look forward to reading more!
Take care!
-Light
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WOW-Good.
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Thank you very much, P. 🙂
Much love!
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… it’s all been noted above. (you’re a master with imagery, and heart.) Beautiful poem.
~ m
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Thank you very much, Meredith! Hope you’re doing well! ♥
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Great words and imagery here, my dear. I read this three or four times, and each time I understood it just that little bit more. I’m just a little confused about this line:
“The warmth that saves us
and suffocates us”
–I would love to know what was going on inside that brilliant mind of yours when you wrote this line. hmmm.
🙂 ❤
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Thank you very much, Staci! 🙂
About those lines – I had two aspects in mind
First – It is about people who say that they don’t want to be saved but they do – we all want to be, that I suppose is the natural scheme of thoughts. Hence, the warmth – help, it saves them and suffocates them. I wrote it because I’m one of those ‘people’.
Second – Since, the lines above depict how Nature in itself is complete – humans generally don’t play a part in it but the vice-versa is true – We need Nature for a balanced sustenance. Yet, we are so accustomed to the daily luxuries that it has become almost impossible to be in peace with Nature. Hence, Nature saves us but us not being a part of it even if we want to can be suffocating.
There you go. Hope you found the explanation satisfactory. 🙂 ❤
Also, Happy Halloween!! I have sent some fruit flavoured candies for my Halloween buddies. Hope they are doing well. 😀
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Oh Wow, that’s great. Brilliant thinking you’ve got going there. I love it. I totally agree, about nature and needing it, but we’re addicted to distractions and business that at the same time we go nuts far from it.
Wow.
Thanks a ton for explaining that. And thanks for the Halloween wishes. My kids will love the candies, as here in Brazil Halloween isn’t celebrated (although they totally want to celebrate it). I’ll be making dipped wafers with chocolate eyes for them later.
🙂 ❤
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Thank you! 😀
Oh, they are lucky kids. ❤ 🙂
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OH WOW OH WOW OH WOWWWW!!! You make sadness so beautiful!!! And the last two lines were just oh WOWWW!!!! All i can say now is Ohh wowwww!!! BEAUTIFULLY done!! ❤
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OH THANK YOU, THANK YOU THANK YOU, FATINA! You’re far too kind and generous, my friend! *hugs* ❤
Much love!
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Nope, i’m not generous :p i just like speaking what i feel, when i feel it to an extreme. Hehehhe just a little hyper and well, super appreciative towards stuff that reaches my heart! ❤
Stay awesome! 🙂
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